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Russia x Reader
.:Love Sick:.

You sneezed several times in a row before you could reach for a tissue.
Your friend Ivan was helping you out today since you were sick.
He handed you a couple of tissues.
"You are okay, da?" He said, a thick Russian accent coaxing his voice.
You nodded and blew your nose, making a loud 'horn' sound.
Your head was killing you, your throat felt like you had swallowed broke glass.
All you wanted to do was go into hibernation for as long as your body would let you.
Of course, that would be impossible because humans can't hibernate.
So for now you were stuck in your house, letting your friend take care of you as if you were a
child.
Althought on the inside, you didn't necessarily mind having his company.
Infact, you really enjoyed it!
You'd never tell anyone this, but you cared deeply for your Russian friend.
Most people thought he was scary or creepy, but you saw nothing but sweetness when you
looked at him.
That cute smile he always had on made you want to smile along with him.
It made you sad when you found out how utterly lonely he really was.
He feared that everyone around him would leave him, something you feared FOR him.
But you knew he'd never be alone, because you'd always be by his side.
Whether that'd be as his friend...or possibly more.
Not that he'd ever like you back.
You yawned quietly and stretched out your arms.
"Tired?" He asked.
You simply nodded as you rubbed your eyes.
"Alright, I'll be downstairs if you need me" He said, starting his way out of the bedroom.
But you had something else in mind.
"I-Ivan...." You called out weakly.
He turned to you "Da?"
You blushed slightly, not from the cold, but from embarrassment.
"C-could you stay h-here?" You asked shyly.
It was his turn to blush, his cheeks tinging with a light pink.
"Of course sunflower"
You scooted over so that way he may climb in beside you.
He wrapped his arms around your torso and pulled you to his chest.
You burried your head in his chest, and fell asleep soon after that.
"Sleep well, sunflower" And with that, he dozed off along with you.

~

You slowly opened your eyes, still in Ivan's tight embrace.
"I see you're awake"
You looked up at him and nodded.
"Did you sleep well?"
You replied with just another nod.
Your heart was beating so fast, you felt like it was going to burst out of your chest.
He separated himself from you and got out of bed.
"Are you feeling and better?"
You didn't respond, you didn't realize he was speaking to you.
Either that, or you just didn't want to answer.
You sniffled quietly to yourself 'I-I shouldn't be c-crying...'
He turned to you abruptly "What's wrong sunflower!?"
When you didn't give him an answer he pulled you into another tight embrace.
After a few minutes of complete silence, besides your sniffling, you finally spoke
"I-I'm sorry Ivan...."
He looked at you, his eyebrows furrowing in confusion "Why are you apologizing..?"
That's exactly what you didn't want to hear, you took in a deep breath and spoke.
"I love you..", you mumbled shyly, the three words that would determine your fate with Ivan.
His eyes widened, he looked down at your small form in his arms and leaned in slowly.
You blushed furiously, not knowing what he was going to do.
His lips brushed against yours, and he whispered "? ???? ???? ?????", before kissing you
with unintentional force, but packed with love non-the-less.
He backed away from you a bit, an adorable blush coating his cheeks.
After processing all that had just happened, you wrapped you arms around his neck and
smiled "Thank you!".
He chuckled and looked down at you "For what?"
In a nasally voice you replied "For loving me".
I started this a LONG time ago, and just finished it...
Does it really suck?
Yes, yes it does...
I know the idea isn't original in any way whatsoever, but..
I have no excuse ^ ^"
Translation:
(Russian)Я тоже тебя люблю-I love you too(English)
..Although you probably new that was English...
I just like hearing myself type, if that makes sense.
Just call me a Shigure~! 10 points to Griffandor if you get that reference xD
Anyway, Russia belongs to :iconhimaruyaplz: and to Hetalia, which obviously also belongs to :iconhimaruyaplz:.
You now belong to Russia~!
Be careful, he's into bondage
Critiques are requested dudes~!
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Critique by OrigamiPaperAngel Jul 18, 2012, 4:31:08 PM
Aww, this is adorable! :heart: Very cute and sweet. I wouldn't at all say it sucks, although I can give you a couple pointers. ^.^

First off, the first three lines would flow much better if they were in a single paragraph, rather than being on three separate lines; also, you always, always should put periods after your sentences, even if it's a quote. A couple times you forgot to put periods before or after your quotes (for example: He turned to you abruptly "What's wrong sunflower!?" The proper way to write this would be to put a period after "abruptly.")

You also need punctuation before a quote; for example -
Instead of: After a few minutes of complete silence, besides your sniffling, you finally spoke "I-I'm sorry Ivan...." it would be proper to put a colon before "spoke", as in: After a few minutes of complete silence, besides your sniffling, you finally spoke: "I-I'm sorry Ivan...." So, a colon or a period after the "spoke" would do just fine.

Also, never connect two independent clauses with a comma, as you did in line 6; here I'll quote from The Elements of Style by E.B. White and William Strunk, Jr: "If two or more clauses grammatically complete and not joined by a conjunction are to form a single compound sentence, the proper mark of punctuation is a semicolon.” So, the grammatically proper way to write line 6 would be to either add an “and” between the two independent clauses, or, as per the quote above, write a semicolon.

Actually, I'd say, just work on your punctuation and spacing overall and your stories would improve drastically! You're already a good writer, but if you keep that in mind and work on improving your spacing & punctuation, I'd say you'd improve a lot. Hope I helped, and I enjoyed your story! :)
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katietemonster Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Omigosh, you're referencing Fruits Basket! ^_^ So happy now

Great story! I love Ivan way too much... <3
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iLAUGHatEVERYTHING Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist
Haha ding ding ding we have a winner! 

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it :3

:icongrin--plz: :iconthanksplz:

And thanks for the fav!
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katietemonster Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! \(owo)/ (Shigure's my favorite character in Fruits Basket! <3 highschoolgirlshighschoolgirlsallformehighschoolgirls)

No problem! This was so perfect ^_^
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iLAUGHatEVERYTHING Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist
(Lol, ikr? He's great!)

Thank you :heart:
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DoruDesux1 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So adorable!  ;w;
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iLAUGHatEVERYTHING Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist
Thank you! :D
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DoruDesux1 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your welcome!! I am a dummy! 
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SugarXD Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013
HSDFUJSkosdfidhgvOKLD *dies of fangirling*
Russia!!!! I hope he comes to my house and cures my "sickness"
If you know what I mean ;D
I luv it Poland Talking...
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hannah12987 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is what the picture and story make me want to do. nosebleed +faint =Shinigami CHOP 
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iLAUGHatEVERYTHING Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist
I hope that's good! XD
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